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高考书面表达专练(共十四节--第三节)

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人物介绍(Introducing Somebody)

高考书面表达专练(共十四节--第三节)

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Although Princeton, New Jersey, has a world-famous university, it is still a small quiet town. It is not a place where anyone would expect to see strange characters on the street. That is why one woman will never forget the day in 1940 when, as a child, she suddenly saw a funny-looking man coming towards her. “I remember,” she tells her children now, “how wild his white hair looked---as if it had been electrified. He was short. His clothes seemed to be just pulled on to keep him covered, like a blanket to keep one warm. He had a big nose, a short, thick moustache, and deep-set eyes. He was staring, thinking. He almost knocked me down before he saw me. He gave me a friendly smile, then he walked on and went on thinking. I noticed he had on bedroom slippers. He had forgotten to put on his shoes. He looked as if he had just stepped out of my book of fairy tales and had passed me like a spirit. That night at dinner when I told my family about the strange, funny man I had seen, my father put down his knife and fork, looked at me and said,‘My child, remember this. Today you saw the greatest man in the world!’”

That man was Elbert Einstein. How and why he had come to Princeton, New Jersey is a story of struggle, success, and sadness.

曾经诵记过不少老高中教材的英文片段,这是留下非常深刻记忆的其中一段。想想看,应该有两个原因:一是当时的教材中的确缺少这样描写人物的材料,二是这一段的确写得很精彩,以至于每每看到爱因斯坦的画像时总想起这段描写,而背读起这段文字时眼前又总是浮现出爱因斯坦的形象。这或许就是我们常常说到的“形象生动”、“栩栩如生”吧。

文段边忆边叙,为我们刻画了一位大鼻深眼、短须乱发、衣着随意、不修边幅的人物形象,而他竟然是大名鼎鼎的爱因斯坦,也难怪He was staring, thinking。

推荐背诵文段

常用表达法

1. 性别与婚姻(Sex & Marriage)

I’m a man of forty and have a 9-year-old daughter.

She got married in 1980 and now she has been married for more than 20 years.

I’ m 35 ,male and unmarried.

I got married five years ago but now I’m single.

2.年龄(Age)

He was born in 1995 and is eight years old now.

Born in 1985,he is now an 18-year-old student, studying in a university.

He began to make a living at the age of 14/at an early age.

In his fifties, he began to feel his age .

By the age of 14, he had set up a chemistry lab of his own.3.外貌特征(Appearance)

She is a lovely girl, with a round face, big eyes, white teeth and long waving hair.

He is thin, tall and wearing a pair of thick glasses.

He is a good-looking/funny-looking man, with a thick moustache but no hair left.

He is a tall man, with blue eyes and blond hair. deep-set eyes ,big bright eyes, long straight nose,

brown curling hair, broad shoulders,4.身高(Height)He is 1.76 meters tall.

He is 176 centimeters tall.

He is 176 centimeters in height.

The boy is not tall enough to reach the apple overhead.

He is really a tall man, about 1.98 meters in height.

My height is 1.76 metres .(不合英语习惯)

I’m 1.76 meters high.(身高不宜用high)5.健康状况(Health)Well looked after, the children look healthy.

I’m not so strong, but (I’m) in good health.

Having been in hospital for six months, now she looks very weak.6.教育状况(Education)I started school in 1984 and left school 12 years later.

I went to study in Beijing University in 1984 and 4 years later I graduated (from that university).

We learned many courses, including…I’ve been studying in Tianshan Primary School (No.1 High School, Fudan University) for more than two years and will graduate next semester.

I got my bachelor’s (master’s, doctor’s) degree in mathematics in April 1998...7.特长爱好(Specialty & Hobbies)

I’m good at spoken English and even better at using computers.

I won the first prize in the English speech contest at school last year.

He got the first place in the homepage designing contest.

My favorite sport is swimming and playing table-tennis.

In my spare time, I like reading and enjoying traveling. 8. 详细特色(Something in detail)

举例法(Giving examples):

–He was strict with everybody and in everything he did. One day, we were having classes when…–He was very forgetful. Once he came across an old friend of his in the street and ...

–He had a strange way of making his classes lively and interesting. I still remember my first day as a chemistry student.

写作练习

李涛是我校年轻的老教师。他被看作是老教师,是因为他教化学课已经有20年了。说他年轻,因为他今年还不过38岁。 他长得较瘦。头上头发不多,灰白了。他戴着深度眼镜,牙齿又缺了2颗。所以他看上去比他实际年龄要大。他说,在公共汽车上常常有人给他让座。事实上。我曾看见他不止一次地给怀抱婴儿的妇女让过座。只要听一听他的化学课--那课又生动又有趣,你就会发现他真正的年龄。

习作点评

Li Tao is a young but “old” teacher in our school. He is often regarded as an old teacher because he has taught chemistry for over 20 years. He is a thin man with thick glasses. The little grey hair and lacking of two teeth make him look older than his real age.

He often says that there are many people giving their seats to him in buses. But in fact, I saw him giving his seat to the woman who takes her baby in her arms more than once. If you have his lively and interesting chemistry lessons, you will find that he is no more than 38 years old

本文叙议结合,对原材料调控有度,取舍得当,是一篇很好的习作。

修改建议:

1.第二段第一句有chinglish之嫌,可改为:…says that many people give their seats to him.

takes改为 who took。

3.最后一句应改为If you have ever had…

参考范文

A teacher

Li Tao is a young and old teacher in our school. He is regarded as being old for he has been teaching here for 20 years. He is seen, at the same time, as being young as he is now but 38 years old. He doesn’t have much hair on the head. And it is nearly all white. Missing two teeth and wearing thick glasses, he looks older than he really is. He says people often offer their seats to him for his old looks. On the contrary, I myself saw him give up his seat to a woman with a baby in her arms. At least twice he did so. When you attend his interesting and lively classes, you will be sure of his real age ---still young.